DNF at 15%
I am baffled. I don’t understand where all the 5-star reviews are coming from. I am also mad at myself for trusting those reviews and going for this book based on them. I feel like I got bamboozled.
Yes, it’s a debut and also the first book in a series, which means it has to do a lot of heavy lifting when it comes to introducing the world, the plot, and the characters. So I am willing to give it a bit of grace, but my patience only stretches so far.
First of all, the pacing. I was 15% in when I threw the towel, and the plot hadn’t even started yet. We had a long prologue that kinda sorta introduced the main protagonist, along with a huge infodump about the world he lives in. Then we get this long and drawn-out heist where the author tries his best to introduce all the characters on Gray’s crew, along with their backstories. Do we really need the whole backstory of the Crest Knights right in the middle of what is supposed to be a high-stakes heist? Why do I need 3 pages of her backstory while they are crawling along a ventilation shaft in this super-high security facility? Any tension and anticipation I had for this just died on the vine.
And this tendency to overexplain, infodump, then summarize it again for good measure a few pages later, continues throughout the portion of the book I read. Why? The readers aren’t stupid. We do not need everything spelled out and summarized for us.
My other issue is the characters. Yes, they are likable. They are also so overpowered from the very start that there is no tension to the confrontations, and the seemingly high stakes fall flat. I mean, you have what is supposed to be an edge-of-your-seat scene in the beginning with two of the protagonists pinned down in a small room by twenty highly skilled soldiers with only one way out… But this is barely an inconvenience when Gray’s companions seems to be a one-woman army who dispatches those “highly skilled” soldiers in less than 5 minutes without either of them taking any damage.
Also, those “highly skilled” soldiers have never been taught how to clear a room properly? No, I mean, they forgot to check behind the door when they stormed into the room (which has one entry point). Then they conveniently turn their back to the door (all three of them) and let the Crest Knight kill them like the idiots that they seem to be.
So the fact that the characters are so overpowered that you don’t feel worried about their survival, added to the fact that their enemies are morons, just makes me not give a s&*t about this story from the get-go.
There are also some plot and description inconsistencies that could easily have been avoided if a good content editor had given the draft a pass, like that scene in the vault. The author says that one of the protagonists closes the door once the three soldiers rush in… Yet in the next paragraph, both protagonists are exchanging fire with the remaining soldiers through the open door… It’s one or the other. It can’t be both at the same time.
I was fully willing to give this debut a chance, but I value my time too much to have to drudge through 500+ pages of this.
PS: I received an advanced copy of this book via NetGalley in exchange for an honest review.
